You've successfully articulated a classic indie film premise, which is great for film festivals, less so for a 'problem' I can invest in with a tangible, scalable solution.

Your 'market size' slide is a black hole where numbers should be. Unless you're measuring the global market for familial angst, I see zero evidence of a scalable opportunity.

A business model for a movie? Are we going to sell artisanal tears? Because your 'plan' to generate revenue is as clear as abstract expressionism.

Your team consists of a director and a cameraman. Impressive for a film shoot, but you're missing a CTO, a growth hacker, or anyone who knows how to build a company beyond a single movie.

Your 'traction' is the emotional journey of two characters, not customer acquisition. I need metrics, not metaphors; a marketing plan, not mood boards.

The aesthetics are great for a film school project; your mood boards are evocative. But for a VC pitch, it's missing the actual business data it needs to communicate.