The "Singularity" theme is ambitious but borders on abstract without a clearer articulation of the market gap for LPs. The persistent "unpredictable" mantra combined with the "VERTICLES" typo undermines confidence.

You talk a big game about "globally critical industries" but don't bother to quantify a single one of them. "Explosive growth" is great, but even a blind squirrel finds a nut; show me the size of the orchard.

Your fund structure is boilerplate, but claiming "10x outperformance" on one page and then projecting a 3x MOIC on another makes me question if you even read your own deck. Pick a number, any number, just make it consistent.

The individual track records are stellar, making me wonder why you're starting this fund. But for a deep tech fund launching in Q3 2025, an advisory board that's all "identified" and "approached" means you're not ready to actually leverage that 'singularity.'

Your *personal* traction is phenomenal, congrats on those 200x (unrealized, naturally). But your GTM for *this new fund* looks like buzzword bingo with "AI-driven DD" while your critical Science Advisory Board is still in LinkedIn scouting mode.

Six identical title slides for a 26-page deck? Did you run out of clip art ideas? And "Verticles"? You're pitching a fund based on advanced intelligence, but can't proofread your own slides.